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Topic:international tourism is biggest industry in the world,unfortunately,international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different countries.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As an important industry in the world,international tourism,confronts to a series of problems while brings plenty of profits to the locals.There raises drastic doubt about whether or not its tension outweigh its understanding.Here I will discuss the pros and cons of issue in details in the following.

On the understanding aspect.the locals,take advantage of developing tourism,obtain the tremendous economic profits and strengthen different culture communication.throughtout learning from the vistors come from advanced countries,the critizens broden the view—How wonderful the modern world is!moreover,several countries impose the tax of tourism,they get significant success.Take Egypt for an example,the travelling income occuers huge p

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