这一次的问题真的要高手来解答了(关于诗)

写的不错！ 如果刚开始写，这个已经真的相当好了。我来简单分析一下：
1.你运用了诗歌中一个很普遍的技巧： enjambment,即跨行连续
通俗讲叫leg. 就是前面一行没有句法上的结束，而是延续到后面一行，或几行。
2. 你运用了repetition. 重复a beautiful mistake起到加强语气效果，而你同时没有把整个一行都重复，又使诗歌活泼了许多， well done! 除此以外还有其他地方的重复。
3. 押韵结构上 采取 abc, adc, aec 的pattern, 很整齐！

我来修改一下，供你参考，一般情况下，我不主张修改诗歌，因为诗歌创作是纯粹的personal 的。所以之个别地方动一下。

A beautiful mistake of meeting her
Was made in the morning
When the dew with silver ray only

A beautiful mistake of loving her
Occured in the afternoon
When roses and tulips booming warmly

A beautiful mistake of leaving her
Deepened in the cold night
When piercing wind blew strongly

真厉害````我都看不懂 狠人真多

那个her很幸福的说。

厉害~~
A beautiful mistake of meeting her
made in the morning
when the sun rose with silver ray lonely

A beautiful mistake of loving her
happened in the afternoon
when roses and tulips were booming warmly

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