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以下是我的修改,请楼主比照一下.因为写出具体原因太耗时耗力,敬请原谅.如有疑问,请给我发消息.
If I were Jane, would I leave Mr. Rochester?

I can’t understand why Jane left Mr. Rochester after she knew Mr. Rochester had a wife. And I think she was just refusing to enter the heaven.
So if I were Jane, I wouldn't leave Mr. Rochester.
Firstly, I believe that Mr. Rochester loves me, which is a very important reason for me not to leave him.
Next, I think that Mr. Rochester can deal with these things well, because he has so much ability.
Thirdly, if I left him, he would be lonely, very lonely. So I will live with him, and let the time prove that he really loves me .
Last, it's just a imagination that, if Jane didn’t leave Mr. Rochester, maybe the end of this story will be more perfect with less hurt and less pity.

时态不一致:And I think she was just refusing to enter the heaven.
虚拟语气不恰当:prove that he really loves me .
不定冠词用错:just a imagination

总体感觉是不错的,结构很整齐