UC知道考过雅思的 且作文不错的进来一下把。。
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我一般写作文都是这个水平了，没有像别人说的外国人的思路，也没有什么长句子。
很简单的作文 帮忙看看 能要几分 如果有什么不好的地方 一定帮忙提一下！谢谢！！
topic :some people think children's spending time on TV,video and PC games is good,while others think it is bad.discuss both views and give your own opinion.......
In the contemporary society,children have more choices to playthan before such as:watching TV programms,viedoss and PC games.Somebody claim that it's a very good way for relaxing ,but others argue it has detrimental influence on children.After pondering this question on many occasions i think their views are both partly true.
It is undiable that our life is greatly enriched by those entertainments.Children could ease their minds after a tired boring day in school and those could afford them entertainment and pleasure.For children,they can receive not only enjoy themselver during the period they watch TV but also could broaden their horizons
很简单的作文 帮忙看看 能要几分 如果有什么不好的地方 一定帮忙提一下！谢谢！！
topic :some people think children's spending time on TV,video and PC games is good,while others think it is bad.discuss both views and give your own opinion.......
In the contemporary society,children have more choices to playthan before such as:watching TV programms,viedoss and PC games.Somebody claim that it's a very good way for relaxing ,but others argue it has detrimental influence on children.After pondering this question on many occasions i think their views are both partly true.
It is undiable that our life is greatly enriched by those entertainments.Children could ease their minds after a tired boring day in school and those could afford them entertainment and pleasure.For children,they can receive not only enjoy themselver during the period they watch TV but also could broaden their horizons
我第一次雅思作文也是6 告诉你一个算是秘密吧 老外看作文的话只看开头和结尾的 中间一晃而过... 所以建议你开头一定要写的好 长句多 结尾精髓一点...
另外 你的这篇作文比我当初写的好多了 所以我觉得这篇可以拿到6.5到7分...
~viedoss~（你的原文）
还要注意自己的语法和拼写，老外会在这方面给咱扣分，我第一次考雅写作6，建议多看看剑桥后面系列的雅思考范文，找找感觉。
还有我的诀窍是拿好小作文的分，小作文那个7很容易练出来，大作文预测现在越来越难了，你每个类型的在考前都写一篇，考试时一定比较好搞定！加油。