求求各位英语好的一定要帮帮我！

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Hello everyone！My name is Jane，my Chinese name isXXX. I am study in Lixue primary school. I am Sagittarius(射手座), so I am an outgoing and optimistic girl. I like English very much，and I like drawing ，reading too. I have many hobby！I like sports. My favorite sport is tennis. My favorite color is green. Because green is very bright. I think language is very interesting. So I will study hard to catch up others with each passing day. I hope I can be you friend! Thank you!
以上是本人在中学亮相的自我介绍，我希望能够与众不同并且有特点，最主要的还是不要有什么语法或者单词拼写错误！所以本人在此希望各位大虾要是觉得有错误或者哪里能修改的更好一定要告诉本人，我绝对给高分！

I am 后面应该加动名词 所以可以把study 改成studying，或者直接说I study in... 因为是一个长期的过程，可以用一般现在时。
但是根据你的意思，Lixue primary school应该是你的小学吧，那就不能用上面两种方法，建议你用过去时或过去完成时，I have been studying in... for多少多少年。

I have many hobbies.
hobby是一个可数名词
我建议你把这句话放到like english 和 drawing,reading 前面去，毕竟这些也是你的爱好啊 ^_^

language 本身不intersting啦，最好改成 learning languages is interesting。

下一句应该改成catch up with others each passing day。catch up with 是个固定词组哦，是不是不小心打错了呀。

下一句应该you 改成 your哟。
不过我建议把这句话改成 I hope I will make friends with you in the near future.

刚上中学啊，英语学的不错了呢，加油哟

I study in ,hobbies,去掉passing，I hope I will make friends with you!!or I hope I can be YOUR friend.小学生能达到这种水平已经很不错了！继续努力吧，加油哦！

am study - am studying
Sagiitarius - a Sagittarius
hobby - hobbies
language is - languages are
catch up others - catch up with others

hello everyone, my name is Jane, xxx is my chinese name.curretly i am studying in linxue primary scho