初学六级作文，麻烦高手批阅。

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It seems that I am ill
I am good in the mood，【加上however,】for I have a lot of friends.
but tonight [wc] 【the WC】[is删] 【seemed to be】my home 【“home”】[删that] 【加for】I went [into washroom for删] several times.
I am not well.
I do【do换成did，用过去式】 not eat【eat换成have，因为后面有“喝水”】 [anythings去掉s] [that删]【except for】 a bottle of water, which means that I 【would】losse 【拼写】weight again.
I am leaving now, but I 【加be动词am】very worry 【worried】about them, escepecially 【拼写】a girl of them,
There are three reasons of it, 【:】she is a little girl; 【she is lovely】as well as [she is删] kind,
What the most important thing I want to know is if that place is dangerous for therm,especially for her..
I do not understand the world which is true.
【【优点】】有一些句子通顺，并且能用复合句，还有as well as, what the most important…等句型说明你是有相当的功底的，甚至用一些修辞，能够学以致用，很有潜力。
【【不足】】存在不少句子结构、时态、措辞拼写错误。希望注意。另外缺乏中心。主题不集中。
【【建议】】多读多背一些简单范文，同时多练。很快你就会有质的飞跃。这只是基本的修改。同样一篇文章，在你提高一些后，我会给你更深层次的