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There are many memorable in my life, but only one thing give me deeply memorable. As a child, I was so naughty that I often got into trouble. The thing had happened when I was six-year- old. One day, I went to my grandpas’ home, but there were no adults in home, only my two brothers, we were as natural as to play together. It was a very hot summer, so we began to play water that made ourselves to be getting nice and cool. We climbed up the windowsill; the windowsill was too small to us, sullenly I felled down the windowsill. We were all stupefied. At that time, I felled a hugely painfully come from my right arm. I know my arm was fracture, so I began to crying. My brothers calling my parents while comforting me. I was very afraid, they had given me very great courage. They didn’t leave me until my father came back. They took me to the No. 4 people’s hospital. Though it has passed for 16 years, I’ll forever remember it.
only one thing GIVES me (singular,所以是第三人称单数）
The thing 听起来很奇怪，U should use ONE THING
six-YEARS-old (plural)
grandparents' or grandpa's
no adults AT home
we were as natural as to play together (这句话不通） what are you trying to say?
去掉“to be getting"
too small FOR us
SUDDENLY (check ur spelling)
i FELT (not felled)
i felt A GREAT SURGE OF PAIN COMMING from my right arm
MY ARM HAS FRACTURED
i begun to CRY
CALLED my parents while they comforted me
去掉"very" ,,just great courage
People's Hospital 大写
remember it forever.. 倒过来 =]
there are many memorable events in my life, but only one is unforgetable. as a child, i was so naughty that i often got into troubles. this happened when i was six years old. that day, i went to my grandpa's home, but there were no adults there, only my two