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来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/15 13:28:42
I plan to complete the undergraduate curriculum in 4 years and obtain the Bachelor’s degree.At the same time,I decide to do some social inspection after school to have a deeper view of the advanced economic type in Korea and know more about the trend of development,with the aid of SNU’s abundant library resources.In that way,to make myself become an economic talent with solid theoretical foundation and rich specialized knowledge.Meanwhile I will also take a class about the history of modern economics if time allows so that I can draw lessons from failures of the past ones and destine for success.After completing my study of Bachelor’s program,I would like to study MBA before I devote myself to the business and economic relationships between Korea and China.

I plan to obtain my Bachelor degree in 4 years. Aside from completing my course, I decide to do some extra research concerning South Korea's economy, in order to know more about the trend of its development. By this, I hope that I could become an expert in economy with solid theoretical foundation, as well as specialized knowledge of the economic field. Meanwhile, if possible, I would also like to take a class on the history of modern economics, in order to learn from past failure and be successful in the future. After the completion of my Bachelor program, I would also like to further my studies in MBA, before devoting working in the field of business and economic relationships between South Korea and China.

你的文章基本上太罗嗦，有很多令人混淆的句子，所以在此特意在句子的结构方面做了一些改动。

MBA全名为“Master in Business Administration”，意义为“工商管理硕士”，是学位的名称，不是课程，所以不能用“Study”。

Korea泛指“朝鲜”，即包括朝鲜和韩国这两个国家。为了明确句子的含义，特意在Korea前面加上South，来表示“韩国”（South Korea）。

希望这能够帮助你。

在Meanwhile后面加逗