UC知道帮忙修改一下演讲稿：my hobbies（提点建议也可以），谢谢啊
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Good morning! Ladies and gentlemen, teachers and friends. Let me introduce myself first. My name is ***. I’m in Year 8 at ****** Secondary School. Today I’m very glad to be here to share with you my hobbies.
To talk about hobbies, I think we should know what is hobby. It is an activity that you do for pleasure when you’re not working. Different people have different hobbies. For example, someone likes reading, someone enjoys labor, someone loves collecting stamps and so on.
I used to travel because I love the nature. But now, I prefer reading to traveling, and the books have broadened my horizons. From <Romance of the Three Kingdoms>, I know the history; From <Hundred Thousand Whys>, I get more knowledge; From <Three Days to See>, I understand the meaning of life.
In addition, I go shopping in supermarkets every weekend because I am fond of shopping. I enjoy the process very much and it can be exciting. I think shopping is a good way to make our life co
To talk about hobbies, I think we should know what is hobby. It is an activity that you do for pleasure when you’re not working. Different people have different hobbies. For example, someone likes reading, someone enjoys labor, someone loves collecting stamps and so on.
I used to travel because I love the nature. But now, I prefer reading to traveling, and the books have broadened my horizons. From <Romance of the Three Kingdoms>, I know the history; From <Hundred Thousand Whys>, I get more knowledge; From <Three Days to See>, I understand the meaning of life.
In addition, I go shopping in supermarkets every weekend because I am fond of shopping. I enjoy the process very much and it can be exciting. I think shopping is a good way to make our life co
开头段不够吸引人，不成功。different people这句大家都用就不要用了，不能吸引人也没意义。第二段气势还不错，但语言还是太平淡。body部分开头可以用一样的句式，气势会更好，奥运会那个没联系啊，有点废话了。in my opinion不要用在开头结尾。总的说文章还不错，但是作为演讲稿还是不够好的，多用修辞啊，像比喻啦，排比啊，还要注意现场感，就是要提到你的听众。要有与众不同的地方，尤其是开头！不过八年级写得出这个也很好了，如果对演讲感兴趣可以好好研读i have a dream，那个是典范啊！
第2行末尾那个，YEAR 8 改成GRADE 8
基本上没什么大问题.小问题嘛,本人水平不够指导修改.
句句之间的衔接词用得不错.
要是能把简单句浓缩成复合句会更出彩的.
第2行末尾那个，YEAR 8 改成GRADE 8
基本上没什么大问题.小问题嘛,本人水平不够指导修改.
要是能把简单句浓缩成复合句会更出彩的