UC知道请大家给这篇英语作文打分.
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一篇高二的英语作文，满分25.请大家公平的打打分，如果有错或者多余的也请指出，谢谢！
题目是My future hometown
In my dream,my future hometown is a big green garden with many trees growing on all sides.It is surrounded by the beautiful flowers,and the grass is growing everywhere.Around my hometown are many newly built houses and tall buildings,they are the symbols of the development of my hometown. The scenery there is very nice,you can even hear birds singing outside the room and see them flying into the sky.The environment is so good that sometimes you even have difficulties in telling the differences between a big tree and a tall building.
My future hometown is a wonderful paradise,and my dream is to live in it right now!
题目中的要点提示：
1.未来的家是一个绿色花园，四周是绿树，鲜花，青草，新房和高楼。
2.无需出门，你便可以听见鸟儿唱歌，看见你鸟儿飞翔。
3.有时你很难把树与高楼辨别出。
要求100字左右
谢谢了！！
题目是My future hometown
In my dream,my future hometown is a big green garden with many trees growing on all sides.It is surrounded by the beautiful flowers,and the grass is growing everywhere.Around my hometown are many newly built houses and tall buildings,they are the symbols of the development of my hometown. The scenery there is very nice,you can even hear birds singing outside the room and see them flying into the sky.The environment is so good that sometimes you even have difficulties in telling the differences between a big tree and a tall building.
My future hometown is a wonderful paradise,and my dream is to live in it right now!
题目中的要点提示：
1.未来的家是一个绿色花园，四周是绿树，鲜花，青草，新房和高楼。
2.无需出门，你便可以听见鸟儿唱歌，看见你鸟儿飞翔。
3.有时你很难把树与高楼辨别出。
要求100字左右
谢谢了！！
18分吧
in telling the differences between a big tree and a tall building.
有点啰嗦
写作文不是搞翻译的呵呵
你语法学得不错啊
16分
虽然把要点都写到了，但是读起来觉得衔接不是很流畅。语言缺少亮点。
Surrounded with green trees,various flowers,there is many new houses and tall buildings .Like a green garden ,that is the hometown in my dream.
我觉得这样开头比较能得到老师的好感，印象分会增加。
个人意见，自己在思考下吧。