请英语高手指教一下，我写的英文有哪些错误，第一次写英文呢！

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/26 00:39:32
Next year i'll leave 农大university to work outside,so the time at the universty is less and less.In this short times i hope that my english study can be much better than past times.Because of this i can find a good job to get a good salary to buy many things that i love.
But up to now i have't gave enough confidence to myself ,i'm still study less and play more.I often ariticize myself that why i'm still like a child ,i hate myself.
Summer holidays passed quickly,i didn't realize my mistake until today.I understand that time is tricky.It is difficult to control and easy to waste.When you look ahead you think you have more time than you need .But it isn't this ,i don't have enough time to study. so i get worried,whte shall i do?control !control!control!
today i make a big decision,and spent the whole day in my room---i must be study harder and harder.I believe that my dream must be come true and i must be find a good salary .Next year i ca

have work outside
the time of university
in this short time
past (times)
because I could find a better job and better salary to buy everything I like
but till now,I still don;t get enough selfconfidence,& I still study less & play more why I still like a child
I don;t realize my mistake till now
but it's totally wrong so I'm worrying about this,what could I do,concentrate & focus
I must study harder...
my dream will come true if I study harder and I could find a good job

Dude,too much.you just talk & talk & talk ....

就第一次写英文来说不错了

都是慢慢学会写的

我没看完 就看来几句

简单来说楼主

我要是如果说话是这样说说不完一句一句的然后又一句的

你看了觉得别扭不？

再简练些 改动一下句子 会更好

而且用词也太简单了

而且还有些chinglish在里面
比如第2句
so the time at the universty is less and less.

写
the time left in the uni for me to study english is geting less

（left用remi什么的的一个词更好 但是我怎么都想不起来怎么拼了