UC知道第一次写雅思文章,请高手指教
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剑5 TEST1的两篇作文,题目分别是:
Task1:图表作文，题目大概是要描述那幅图，USA JAPAN SWEDEN的65岁以上的人口
TASK2：Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree of disagree?
我的作文：
The diagram illustates the proportion of people who are 65 or over 65 from 1940 to 2040 in 3 coutries.
From the graph,it can be seen that until 2000 the population have the longest age in USA whilst the shortest in Japan.But in recent years ,people live the longest in Sweden.
In the USA,the population aged 65 and over increased between 1940 and 1980,while it remain stable from 1980 to 2020.However,the number will increase dramatically from 2020 to 20 years later in 2040.
In Sweden,the number of people who aged 65 and over have risen with some fluctuation since 1940 and it reach a peak in 20% in 2010.
However in Japan,the population aged 65 and over remain the lowtest a
Task2:
需要250词,文中111词
In terms of most IELTS essays, the first segment is to rewrite the topic in a personal way(about 50-70 words)
the second and third segments are to analyse the two attitudes appeared in the topic.(In these two segments, you should give your opinion in the first sentence. Then list one or two instances to support your opinion.Similar to the third segment)
In the end, give your conclusion
In addition
1.avoid to use the frequent words, such as "first of all"
2.avoid to present just one mean with two or more different approaches
grammar issues:
this opinion ignored
differance=>difference
differant subject=>different subjects
I was in high school=>I was at high school
there major=>their majors
different hobby=>different hobbies
it is not true=>it is not realistic
of them in every subject=>of the students in every subject
就大概看