短文中有几处错误?

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Hello.every individual! l am a university student whose major is English.what's more.l am willing to make friends with you via QQ online.so why not write down your QQ numbers? Oh! my QQ is 279251841 and welcome to add me and be my friends.thank you so much!
Meanwhile.l think that we can discuss and talk about a range of topics in which we are interested via QQ including politics.society.science and technology.
religion.geography and many many more as long as we want.so please add me.Furthermore.please tell me that your major is also English.you can input"English" when adding me.thanks for collaborating with me.
At length.on the whole.l am dying to make friends with you and please add me--my QQ number and write yours down as well.adieu See you and the Almighty
will bless you!

every individual---everybody
a university student ---an university student
l am a university student whose major is English. 自我介绍要简单明了,尽量不要用太多定语从句,这句就更不用了,太罗嗦了,直接说l am an university student.My major is English.
many many more --- much more
At length.on the whole 取其一即可,二者重复了

Hello.every individual! l am a university student whose major is English.what's more.l am willing to make friends with you via QQ online.so why not write down your QQ numbers? Oh! my QQ is 279251841 and welcome to add me and be my friends.thank you so much!
Meanwhile.l think that we can discuss and talk about a range of topics in which we are interested via QQ including politics.society.science and technology.
religion.geography and many many more as long as we want.so please add me.Further more.please tell me that your major is also English.you can type in "English" when adding me.thanks for collaborating with me.
At last, on the whole.l am dying to mak