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Love around me
There's a lot of love around me, such as ,my parents' love.
Once I failed an exam. Iarrived my home and cried.My father was cooking at home. When he saw me,he asked me what happened and I told him my mark .He didn't scold me but cheered me up.He encouraged me and said:"Dear,don't cry.I made delicious food for you."I was quite moved .Home is always the warmest place I can feel love.I'll study hard and try to make you happy all the time ,my dear parents.
There's a lot of love around me, such as ,my parents' love.
Once I failed an exam. Iarrived my home and cried.My father was cooking at home. When he saw me,he asked me what happened and I told him my mark .He didn't scold me but cheered me up.He encouraged me and said:"Dear,don't cry.I made delicious food for you."I was quite moved .Home is always the warmest place I can feel love.I'll study hard and try to make you happy all the time ,my dear parents.
1.Once I failed an exam 应该用failed in
2.Iarrived my home 应改为I came back home
3.When he saw me,he asked me what happened and I told him my mark .
应该是what had happened
4.I made delicious food for you.
改为I have made some delicious food for you.
还有就是文章意思不怎么对，你写的是family，your parents，但是你文章里只写了your father
I arrived my home and cried ---I arrived at my home
I made delicious food for you---I will make
the warmest place I can feel love---where Ican