帮我改英语演讲稿 100高分求救英语高手

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六年级演讲
题目My father and I
要求至少改到300个字，不要有太多废话。
我的英文水平不咋的，只能写到200字，谁能帮帮忙？（最好把改过的文章全部发上来）
Hello, everyone. I’m Steven. Today I’d like to talk about my dear father.
In my old mind, my father is different from other children’s fathers. When my friends play foot ball with their fathers my father is working. When my friends have dinner with their fathers my father is eating with his clients. When my friends’ fathers came to the Parents’ Day my father is flying aboard. When other fathers help with their children’s home work, my father is giving a meeting to his personnel. So, I can’t enjoy happy from him. But later, one thing has changed my idea. I found I was wrong.
One night, I could not fall asleep, because not so many classmates voted me to be a study monitor. I was so angry and unhappy. At that moment, my father opened the door quietly. And he found that I couldn’t fall asleep. So, he came to my bed. When he knew what happened, he comforted me. I really can’t

Hello, everyone. I’m Steven.I am very glad to be here to give you my speech. Today I’d like to talk about my dear father.
In my opinion,my father is very a special
father.He works very hard and he is always
so busy.When other fathers were playing football with their children,my father was working.When other fathers were having dinner with the family, my father was having dinner with his clients.When other fathers were helping their children with their homework,my father was on a meeting.It seems that he always has endless things to do,and I can't feel a father's love from him at all.Sometimes,I
even wonder he is my father or not.
But later on, one thing changed my mind.
One night, I couldn't fall asleep because I was failed to be voted as the commissary in charge of studies (学习委员)
during the daytime.I was upset and depressed.Just at that moment, father opened the door quietly.He came to see why
I was still awake.I told him what h