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来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/30 00:49:59
More and more people are driving their own car in the recent years, However, at the same time on front of our eyes a number of problems appear as well, Such as acceleration of life rhythm, increasing of noise and traffic jam. Now that, an increasing possessors of private car weather or not is good or bad to the development of society and people’s health.. It pays to discuss this matter.

In the view of our comfortable life, maybe more problems we often think of is that in which aspects private car influence on us toward disbennifit, for instance, enabling the qualities of our living have gone from good to bad. Over number private cars waste too much petrol of our country, petrol is not only expensive, but also be norenewable. We always usually appeal to protect native resource, especially norenewable something, According to a latest survey, if one can stop driving car only one day, so 5L petrol will be saved. On the other hand, it will cause a serious pollution to our enviro

中文味太浓。

评价：A lot of words， but no message

有时候字太多不是好事譬如说
"More and more people are driving their own car in the recent years, " 可以用 Nowadays, everyone owns a car.

私家车 不是 private car

A lot of people are driving their own cars in the recent years, however, at the same time, as we can see, there are a lot problems appeared as well, such as acceleration of life rhythm, increasing of noise and traffic jam. Now that, the increasing possessors of private car weather or not is good or bad to the development of society and people’s health. It pays to discuss this matter.

In the view of our comfortable lives, more problems we probably often think of is that in which aspects private car influence on us toward disbennifit. For instance, enabling the qualities of our livings have gone from good to bad. Over numbers of private cars waste too much petrol of our country. Petrol is not only expensive, but also be norenewable. We usually ap