高分求!英语达人!为我的小短文纠错润色!

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/22 18:49:45
In a common family, fathers often play an important role and they always make a deep influence on children. My father is not excluded. He is a navy official who has joined the army for more than 20 years. As a father, he is mighty, handsome, humorous and unyielding who is like a mountain casts his shadow in my heart. This kind of effect will even accompany with me for good.
To pursue his ambition and realize his own value that making a contribution to the motherland, leaving the home, the affectionate parents and confidants, my father who is 17 decided to start his new in the army and succeeded in enrolling the military academy. Likewise, in my mind is there a big world. It is me, who is also 17, independent, unswerving, are eager to contribute my share to this world. As I grow up, I made up my mind to further my study in U.S.A on my own, a country that is more open and has more chances. Even though this way is long and full of difficulties, I won’t give up, with my steadfast pace

In a common family, father often plays an important role and makes a deep influence on his children. My father is no exceptance. He is a navy official who has been in the army for more than 20 years. As a father, he is mighty, handsome, humorous and unyielding who is like a mountain casts his shadow in my heart. This kind of effect will even accompany with me for good.
To pursue his ambition and realize his own value that making a contribution to the motherland, leaving the home, the affectionate parents and confidants, my father decided to start his new in the army at the age of 17 and succeeded in enrolling the military academy. Likewise, in my mind is there a big world. It is me, who was also 17, independent, unswerving, and eager to contribute my share to this world. As I grow up, I made up my mind to further my study on my own in U.S.A , which is more open and has more chances. Even though this way is long and full of difficulties, I won’t give up, with my steadfast pace.