不足之处，请多指教，多谢！

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今天你和你的妹妹 Yang Mei 到人民公园（the People Park）去玩，请按下面所给的信息写一则英文日记，80个词左右。
（1）时间：10月3日，星期六
（2）天气：晴，有风
（3）Yang Mei 的外貌：长发，大眼睛，矮个头。性格：文静，害羞。
（4）主要活动：在公园里散步，打网球，练习吉他。
（5）公园里有许多游人。你和你妹妹玩得很痛快。
要求：（1）请注意英语日记的格式。
（2）注意日记中所用的时态。
（3）必须包括上述所有内容，可适当增添。
Saturday October 3rd
I have a sister Yang Mei. She has hair and big eyes. She's short, and a little quite and shy. Today I went to the People's Park with her. It was sunny and windy today. We took walks,played tennis and practiced playing the guitar. We saw many people in the park. Some were singing, some were dancing and some were having a rest.We had a great time in the park.
请一点一点地说出来，谢谢！

1.she has long hair
2.took walks改为 took a walk

其他的写的不错!!

I have a sister named Yang Mei.She has long hair and a pair of big eyes.She's short, shy and a little quite. Today I went to the People's Park with her. It was sunny and windy. We took a walk,played tennis and practiced guitar. There are a lot of people in the park. Some were singing, some were dancing and some were having a rest.We had a great time in the park.

把错误和常用表达都写近来了,你看下.

I have a sister whose mame is Yang Mei. She has long hair and big bright eyes. She's not tall, and is a little quiet and shy. Today we went to the People's Park .The weather was sunny and a little bit windy . We went for a walk,played tennis and practiced playing the guitar. We saw many people in the park. Some were singing, some were dancing and some were having a rest.We had a great time in the park.
恩 总体上说写的不错
多多练习会写的更好
加油啊