请帮我纠正下这个英语短文

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Formerly i think happiness is very difficult .But now, i know that happiness is Simple.
Actually happiness is around you.
don`t any matter is on the heart,they make you to become very old.
don`t always angry,they make your health increasingly bad.
when you feel very angry,You sing a happy song or tell a joke to oneself.
Happiness in your hand. Remembers every day to own smile.
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... 谢谢
就是纠正下哪个词放的位置不对 或者用错词性了

首先允许我说一句话吧.你的英文太中国化了.
1.我想你想说的是"想要开心是很困难的"吧.如果是这样的话,前面两个"happiness"就应该改为"being happiness"了,因为我们中文讲的"开心"是一个名词,而英文说的是动词,这就有很大区别了,"happiness"是一个名词,而"being happiness"就表示一个动作(要开心).
2.我不明白你想说的是什么(第三行第一句),根据"make sb do sth"结构,第二句的"to"应该去掉.
3.第四行最好改为"Don't be angry offen,or it may make your health become worse".
4. 如果把倒数第二行改为"When you feel angry , you can sing a happy song or tell a joke to others".

5.最后一句的结构很乱,不太准确,我建议你将它写成"Happiness belong to you , please keep smileing every day!".
6.你写英语作文的时候,还要注意区分大小写的问题,句子开头一定要大写.

最后呢,本人能力有限,只能是这样了.

Once upon a time, I thought that it is difficult to become happy. However, I know it is so simple to get it now. The happiness is always around you. Don't keep any trouble in your heart, because they are gonna make you become old; don't feel angry, because they are going to make your h