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I was born in Tianjin. Tanggu distrit is my hometown. My father is a captain and my mother is an accountant. I am single child in my family so I achieve more love than other children form my parents. Under their help. I always wants to be better than before, I love them forever..
As is known to all the 29th Olympics was hold in Beijing. I was so excited about it. In this summer holiday, I went to Beijing with one of my best friend in August 4th to 8th. In this trip, I have deeply impressed in Houhai and Wangfujing . Houhai own many bars around the lake street. It was my first time in my life I have saw so many foreignter get together in a small bar . they come from all the world, they are white man black man and Asian, I saw they can communication with each other. I realize the importance of English. In wangfujing every thing is too expensive to buy, and you can saw foreigner everywhere. They are looks so strong and tall. When I walk between with them that I also felled I walk in

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I was born in Tianjin. Tanggu is my hometown. My father is a captain and my mother is an accountant. I am THE ONLY CHILD in my family so I GAIN MUCH LOVE FROM MY PARENTS. WITH their help, I'VE BECOME A BETTER CHILD THAN I USED TO BE, AND I WILL love them forever.

As is known to all, the 29th Olympics was HELD in Beijing. I was so excited about it. In this summer holiday, I went to Beijing with one of my best FRIENDS FROM August 4th to 8th. DURING this trip, I have BEEN deeply impressed BY Houhai and Wangfujing . Houhai OWNS many bars around the Lake Street. It was my first time in my life THAT I have SEEN so many FOREIGNERS get together in a small bar. They CAME from OTHER COUNTRIES ALL OVER THE WORLD, AND AMONG THEM are white ,black and YELLOW. I FOUND they COULD COMMUNICATE with each other. I REALIZED the importance of English. In wangfujing every thing WAS too expensive to buy, and I COULD saw FOREIGNERS everywhere. They