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For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write each of the three essays on the topic given below．You should write at least 80 words for each writing．
1．过去学生是怎样度过假期的；
2．现在许多学生在暑假期间也挺繁忙；
3．我对此现象的看法
我写得作文是:
The pass is how students spend holidays？They have a lot of time can be used to play．Leave time for them is pleasant.
And ，now the student how to spend holidays? Many students are now very busy during the vacation. They want to participate in a variety of classes. Lost time can be free to play.
I think the holiday is the time can be used to relax. Children should have a happy holiday play.Learning can not be occupied all of the holidays.
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The pass is how students spend holidays？They have a lot of time can be used to play．Leave time for them is pleasant.
And ，now the student how to spend holidays? Many students are now very busy during the vacation. They want to participate in a variety of classes. Lost time can be free to play.
I think the holiday is the time can be used to relax. Children should have a happy holiday play.Learning can not be occupied all of the holidays

There are some differences between how people spend their holidays in the past and at present.
In the past, students had a lot of time to play during their holidays. They would play cards ,play games,chat with their friends hold a party and so on.They often enjoyed themselves.
However,now many students are still very busy during the vacation. They want to participate in a variety of classes,surf the Internet to find useful information about their subjects,make some survey about society and some other activi