UC知道请教英语高手，这篇文章有什么错处或不妥。。。多谢！
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题目What is the contribution to the world that you would most like to be remembered for?
If I like to be remembered for something,it must be to become a charitarian.
when I was a child,yifu shao, Mother Teresa, bill gates,etc.are the idols of me. I have a dream deeply hidden in my heart.I liked to help others who are more pitiful.As time goes by,my desire is more and more stronger.I want to bring them sunshine when skies are grey.just as Mother Teresa ever said: “ a person who is shut out,who feels unwanted,unloved,---the poverty is so full of hurt and so unbearable.”I would like to make them live like angels,loved and cared for.
During the current war,so many innocent children close their eyes forever.they even did not catch up with the new year’s bell.I often come to think of that if Mother Teresa still lives,what she will do?no matter she or me indubitably wants to bring that peace,that joy,that strongth of presence of each other in the home.
If I like to be remembered for something,it must be to become a charitarian.
when I was a child,yifu shao, Mother Teresa, bill gates,etc.are the idols of me. I have a dream deeply hidden in my heart.I liked to help others who are more pitiful.As time goes by,my desire is more and more stronger.I want to bring them sunshine when skies are grey.just as Mother Teresa ever said: “ a person who is shut out,who feels unwanted,unloved,---the poverty is so full of hurt and so unbearable.”I would like to make them live like angels,loved and cared for.
During the current war,so many innocent children close their eyes forever.they even did not catch up with the new year’s bell.I often come to think of that if Mother Teresa still lives,what she will do?no matter she or me indubitably wants to bring that peace,that joy,that strongth of presence of each other in the home.
将most like 改成 like most。
将bill gates 改成Bill Gates
将deeply hidden in my heart改成hidden in my heart deeply
将skies are 改成sky is
将just as改成Just as
current war你要说的是哪次战争
Mother Teresa still lives 改成live
no matter she 改成No matter she
最后一句改成joy,strongth of presence of each other at home.
改地不好请原谅，但是这个文章你是在谷歌翻译的吗？错误实在很多，很不地道的英语。