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In the present age, international aids are playing increasingly important roles in certain poorer countries’s progress. But in the meantimes, whether giving aids to poorer countires has more adverse impact than positive impacts has sparked much dabate. Some people assert that aids to poorer cuontries may cause more troubles of those area. Personally, I think their view is overly simplistic.
Convincing arguments can be made that aids to developing countris may bring the locals numerous benefits. To start with, fanancial aid is one of the direct means to help the area where has the shortage of money. Therefore, with this help, many industries can carry out subjests s,such as construction, business trades, and so on. Moreover, international aid help those people in educational way. Specifically, there are a host of non government organizations building schools there and providing a wide range of shooling, so that many children are really benefit from them.L astly, advanced health car
Convincing arguments can be made that aids to developing countris may bring the locals numerous benefits. To start with, fanancial aid is one of the direct means to help the area where has the shortage of money. Therefore, with this help, many industries can carry out subjests s,such as construction, business trades, and so on. Moreover, international aid help those people in educational way. Specifically, there are a host of non government organizations building schools there and providing a wide range of shooling, so that many children are really benefit from them.L astly, advanced health car
5分到5.5分。In the present age有这个词么？接着international aids are playing increasingly important roles 非常的差劲，完全的汉语式英文
再是poorer…… 我有点无语了
雅思写作不是随便的拿个字典查查就能写出来了，你要想想自己说的是英语么？
后面实在看不下去了，完全不是英语。不知道怎么凑出来的东西，你要去考试的雅思是为了出国，出国是要你真正懂英文的，不然出去了也还是不会跟人交流，没办法学习有用么？
模板用太多了. 读完全文才找到主题句,太累了.LZ,把主题句放在第一段好不?
用词比较中国化,分数的话,我同意1楼评的.