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Technology is making it possible to stay at home and work. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and present your opinion on this issue.
Working at home is becoming increasingly common career choice for many of us. Whether you decide to start your own home business, sell things on eBay, or become a freelance writer, the possibilities for working from home are endless. There are a number of advantages that come with working from home, however, there are also a number of disadvantages come with it. In the following paragraphs I will examine both benefits and downsides of the new phenomenon.
To start rolling the work from home benefits. Let’s take look at someone who choice working from home . For the person, it would be very much convenient since he dosen’t have to worry much about gas prices, or trouble of picking up clothes for work, or spending much time in commuting and so on. In addition, anther benefit that some
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Working at home is becoming (an) increasingly common career choice for many of us. Whether you decide to start your own home business, sell things on(at) eBay, or become a freelance writer, the possibilities for working (at) home(建议用domestically) are endless. There are a number of advantages (ascribe to) working at home; however, there are also a number of (drawbacks coming) with it. In the following paragraphs I’ll examine both benefits and downsides of the new phenomenon.(开头有点平淡,有几处语法错误,且theme 模糊,建议最后一句改成I have to unswervely claim my perspective that the merits overwhelm demerits)
To start rolling the work from home benefits.(incomplete sentence) Let’s take (a) look at someone who (choose to work at home). For the person, it would be much convenient since he doesn’t have to worry about gas prices, or (feel) trouble of picking up clothes for work, or (spend) much time in commuting and so on. In addition, anther benefit that some people who prefer to work from ho