UC知道帮我修改一下，只是30-40的简单的词。
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Today is a terrible but happy day.Maybe you don't understand what me said.But is ture.This afternoon has two things happened.One was wrote a article in my blog.The other was playing badminton.When I wrote a article in my blog,the computer happened Blue Screen of Death.What bad luck!Then I go out to play badminton with my sister.Though the time was a little late,we played very happy.
第一次自己写，虽然差了点，不过应该会慢慢进步的吧。希望大家指出错误，谢谢。
日期： 2009年1月24日星期六天气：阳光
今天是一个可怕的，但高兴day.Maybe你不明白我said.But是ture.This下午happened.One有两件事写了一篇文章是在我blog.The其他打得badminton.When我写了文章我的博客，电脑出现蓝屏Death.What坏运气！然后我出去玩羽毛球我sister.Though的时间有点晚了，我们踢得非常高兴。
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Date:January 24th,2009 Saturday Weather:Sunny
Today is a terrible but happy day.Maybe you don't understand what I said.But it is ture.Two things have happened this afternoon .The first was to write a article in my blog.The other was playing badminton.When I wrote a article in my blog,the computer happened Blue Screen of Death.What bad luck!Then I went out to play badminton with my sister.Though the time was a little late,we played very happy.
还是可以的,注意以下时态,这个慢慢培养..不要着急~
写得很不错，只做了小修改。另外，英语的标点符号后面要空一格。加油！
Today is a terrible but happy day. Maybe you don't understand what I said. But it is ture. I did two things this afternoon. One thing was writing an article for my blog. The other was playing badminton. When I was writing the