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Personal Statement:
I’m a assiduous,accommodating and humorous girl.I love to study some subjects so as to gain new knowledge.My academic potential is above average level in my present school,and I always help my classmates to improve his studies.Helping each other is a part of my quotidian life,it always brings me much joy as well as some advantages.For example,I help a classmate on his physics,he will also help me on my maths(I’m poor at maths).It’s a reality epitome of “win—win”,it’s also my study method.
My goal is to be one of the most outstanding transperonal psychologists.I want to be a transperonal psychologist like Ken Wilber, Krishnamurti,etc.It’s a sacred job because they have been making people get out of negative,and gain self-confidence again.I believe this job is really suit me. I always keep confident,though I usually fail,it’s a valuable spirit to do this job.I’m not intelligent enough,so I must hardwoking enough so that I can realize my goal.Cons
I’m a assiduous,accommodating and humorous girl.I love to study some subjects so as to gain new knowledge.My academic potential is above average level in my present school,and I always help my classmates to improve his studies.Helping each other is a part of my quotidian life,it always brings me much joy as well as some advantages.For example,I help a classmate on his physics,he will also help me on my maths(I’m poor at maths).It’s a reality epitome of “win—win”,it’s also my study method.
My goal is to be one of the most outstanding transperonal psychologists.I want to be a transperonal psychologist like Ken Wilber, Krishnamurti,etc.It’s a sacred job because they have been making people get out of negative,and gain self-confidence again.I believe this job is really suit me. I always keep confident,though I usually fail,it’s a valuable spirit to do this job.I’m not intelligent enough,so I must hardwoking enough so that I can realize my goal.Cons
so as to ---in order to
his studies---their study
quotidian-daily
at maths--in maths
suit=---suit for
confident--confidence
hardwoking--work haed
申请吧 呵呵 这样就没问题了
这样写已经很好了 不用太地道 太地道就不像你自己写的了
显得没诚意了就 我侄子申请过这个 我还是有点经验的
你是初中还是高中啊
11月的时候我也是要写personal statement申请大学
我觉得应该多brag yourself 多说好处 最好不要提到坏处（例如 I always keep confident,though I usually fail,I’m not intelligent enough (I’m poor at maths)，另外，math 很少见加s ）
多说点你做过什麽去达到你想达到的 （例如I will take every opportunity and try my best. 这些是好的）
I believe this job is really suit me.
I believe that this job really suits me
你还可以多讲一点你这个学校会怎样帮到你达到你的理想 （psychologist）
或许你有什麽困难，将来或现在， 你怎麽样克服或者会怎麽克服（英文或许是其中一个？）
总而言之多擡举自己 不过不要过分擡举 毕竟学校想要一个对他们有利的有潜力的学生
自己经验之谈啦
祝你成功！
关于语法问题，我就不纠正了，那是小问题
给你说说明显的方面
首先，你的概括太不具体
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