检查一句英语从句

accepted前面不要加were,这里不用表被动

did not forget our own Chinese culture.
本来应该是一个祈使句
Don't forget our own Chinese culture.
"不要忘记我们自己中国的文化"
改成间接引语要加上主语
we should not forget our own chinese culture
或者直接改成told us not to forget这种行式.

accepted是短暂性的while是强调在...期间,这个多和进行时态连用
这里改成when we accepted比较合适

keep going这里用的有点怪怪的
改成preserve应该会更合适

She told us not to forget our own Chinese culture when we accepted the foreign cultures. China needed our generation to preserve our Chinese culture.
或者
She told us that when we accepted the foreign cultures, we should not forget our own Chinese culture. China needed our generation to preserve our Chinese culture.

补充;没注意到后面一句也是"她"说的,修改意见看楼上的.你自己综合一下.

课外知识
应该这样：
She told us that while we accepted the foreign cultures, we did not forget our own Chinese culture. China needed our generation to keep Chinese culture