大家觉得这首英文诗写得怎么样?

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/25 05:58:30
提出些修改意见最好,有没有语法错误?
Am I That Easy to Forget?

Can anyone resist a virgin snow

falling silenty on a feburary day?

but what i feel is not joy but cold,

for your knowing not my peeking in dismay.

I remember not so long before,

an autumn night on an autumn day.

pleasant breeze filled in the air,

we saw each other in amaze.

hardly will i forget that night,

so sweetly, so deeply in my heart it lies.

but nothing really happend from that day on,

all those carelss talks and meaningless thoughts

back to coldness,i feel again.

shall i erase you from my memory before sunset?

wondering that's how our story ends?

am i that easy to forget?

不错，但是写的有点长，且意境不够美。如果只是邂逅，题目就没有意义，而且整个诗歌看起来是一种自恋自艾。如果是单相思，诗字里行间又没有流露出感情。

同时还有点小问题值得讨论，例如virgin snow是什么，erase you有些别扭，第一段写的是雪，最后一段虽然回到了cold，但有出来了了个sunset，下雪的时候会很关注太阳么，有的时候都看不见太阳，所以还不如改为雪停或者雪化或者天晴了之前。

英语诗歌同样也可以押韵，不会写诗，但是希望对你有帮助

which one?