英语老师或者专业点旳帮涐修改下作文,

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/20 05:00:18
这是我自己写的,请老师们把错误旳地方说明下,再把正确旳打一遍,水平要在初二.

My future

My dream are very ex tensive .

I want to be a primary teacher .I love teacher's job.I also want to be a doctor . I can help many patient .And i want to be a mentality doctor .Because before two months .I fell in love with it sudden .

But i cant't come true they in same time .So in 20 years .I'll be a famous school teacher .Maybe i'm an English teacher .Maybe i'm a Chinese teacher . I'll in Rongcheng or Shanghai. Because there are very developed .In 20 years i won't have any pets .I also love it .But i think i don't konw how to keep it ! Oh ,i think i'll live in a big home . I don't like living alone . So my friends and reative can live in my house .

This is a dream ,I don't know in 20 years what i am .

写的不错，给你改了一点点
My dream are very ex tensive .我猜你想说：I have a lot of dreams about what I am going to be in the future.

I want to be a primary [school]teacher. I love what a teacher is doing.I also want to be a doctor [so that] I can help many patient[s] .[Specifically] i want to be a mentality doctor .Because two months ago.I [ was suddenly interested in it] .

But [they can't] come true [at the] same time .So in 20 years .I'll be a famous school teacher .Maybe i'm an English teacher [or] a Chinese teacher . I'll in Rongcheng or Shanghai. Because there are developed [cities].In 20 years i won't have any pets [although]I also love [them] .But i [don't]think i konw how to keep [them] Oh ,i think i'll live in a big home . I don't like living alone . So my friends and [relatives] can live in my house .

This is [my] dream ,[even though] I don't know 20 years [later] what i [will be] .

虽然初二，写的不错，但是继续努力，行文有些零碎，