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Harmonious Campus

We are longing to build a harmonious campus. But what is a harmonious campus? If the harmonious campus is a big tree,the beautiful environment is the root of the tree; the good relationships are the leaves of the tree; and the colorful campus activities are the soul of the tree.

A harmonious campus is the campus with the graceful natural environment and cultural environment. In our campus, the natural environment is polished. The green grass,the beautiful flowers and the always fine spring days,impress the students with beauty. When the students are walking around the campus, their bodies and minds are pleasant. Moreover, the cultural environment is delicate. The pictures of the excellent students and teachers, the choice work and the outstanding deeds are parts of the environment,all the teachers and students are proud of our school.
Secondly, only the campus with the favorable relationships i

A Harmonious Campus
修改建议：
1、冠词勿忘！

We are longing to build a harmonious campus. But what is a harmonious campus? If the harmonious campus is a big tree,the beautiful environment is the root of the tree; the good relationships are the leaves of the tree; and the colorful campus activities are the soul of the tree.
1、首句改为 We have been making efforts to build a harmonious campus.
2、第三句改为 If I compare a harmonious campus to a big tree, the beautiful environment will be the root, the good relationships among people will be the leaves and the colorful campus activities will be the soul.

A harmonious campus is the campus with the graceful natural environment and cultural environment. In our campus, the natural environment is polished. The green grass,the beautiful flowers and the always fine spring days,impress the students with beauty. When the students are walking around the campus, their bodies and minds are pleasant. Moreover, the cultural envi