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I am chaseing a quite nice girl with a fair face Pitch-black hair.
I really have crash on her so on a class I wrote a note to her . It said :" I whish to make friends with you , would you mind leave your your name?" she neither refused or accepted but to left her name .
It was really a meaningful step for me , over the next weeks I got her QQ Phone number . It seemed everything was OK . But today I feel frustrated because she does not pick up my phone . I am worried about failing again!
I really have crash on her so on a class I wrote a note to her . It said :" I whish to make friends with you , would you mind leave your your name?" she neither refused or accepted but to left her name .
It was really a meaningful step for me , over the next weeks I got her QQ Phone number . It seemed everything was OK . But today I feel frustrated because she does not pick up my phone . I am worried about failing again!
有些小错误
a fair face （and）Pitch-black hair.
on a class ---in a class
It said :" ---It said，“
leaving your your name
she does not pick up my phone --answer
I am chaseing (chasing) a quite nice girl with a fair face (and)Pitch-black hair.
I really have crash(crashed) on her so on(in) a class I wrote a note to her . It said :" I whish(wish) to make friends with you , would you mind leave (leaving)your name?" she neither refused or(nor) accepted but left her name .
It was really a meaningful step for me , over the next weeks I got her QQ Phone number . It seemed everything was OK . But today I feel frustrated because she does not pick up (answer)my phone . I am worried about failing again!
还不错，小的错误该在括号里了。