麻烦帮我改改作文，谢谢

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The value of family
I did not realize what the value of family means to me until the very first day I set foot in the university. My mind is still fresh about that day when my parents told me they would go home then after helping me carry my baggage into the dormitory and unpack them. They turned around and walked away, leaving me alone with my mind blank. Only in that moment did I get fully aware of how dependent I had been on my family and I could not even foresee the life without them. As their figures disappearing in the distance, I felt like losing all the support. For almost 18 years, I have been so accustomed to the care, support and understanding they gave me that I did not consider even once how to live without them. Born in a nuclear family, I obtained all the love from my parents. However, from that day on, I did have to be independent and relied on myself.
Knowing that they miss me not less than I do, I call home frequently. On the phone, I let them know all the t

如果你把第五行的foresee改成tell的话就更好了，这样改不是口语话，是更地道。

As their figures disappearing（-ed） in the distance...

For almost 18 years, I have been so accustomed(used) to the care, support and understanding they gave me that(and) I did not consider even once (have never though of) how to live without them.

However, from that day on, I did have to be independent and relied on myself. （改时态成一般现在时 or I have to learn to be independent and rely on myself.）

写得不错，有时间再来改第二段。

你写的很不错，very good!

The value of family
I did not realize the value of family to me until the very first day I set foot into the university. My mind was still fresh about that day when my parents told me they would go home then after helping me carry my baggage into the dormitory and unpack them. They turned around and walked away, leaving me alone with my mind blank. Only in that moment did I get fully aware of how dependent I had been on my family and I could not even forese