这片英语作文有错吗

Last year,I went to Beijing with my parents.It was a very interesting trip.First,I went to the Tian'anmen Square.It was so big,and there were many children playing games happily.The second day,we went to the Palace Museum,and it was so great.We also learned a lot about politics,culture,history,and so on.If you want to have a good holiday,Beijing is a good choice.
要注意几点哦，
1 时态
2 英语句子句意已完必用句号

第二天：
the next day
the coming day
the following day
the day to come
the day to follow
and so on.

去年，我到北京与我的父母，这是一个非常有趣的trip.First ，我去了天安门广场，它是如此之大，有许多孩子玩。第二天，我们去了故宫博物院，它是如此之大。我们也学到了很多人，地点，历史，甚至it.If你想有一个好的假期，北京是一个很好的选择

把it is改为it was
第二天The next day

1、"it is an very interesting trip"中an 改成a。
2、is全部改成was。
3、there was 改成there were。
4、we also learn 改成leared。