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I loved a boy,He was a pretty boy.
Every snowy night,I went home with him.
Although it's cold outside, my heart was warm inside.
He was a sunny boy.His smile was very bright.
I liked watching him smiling.
His smile was like the spring.
He was strong .
I liked watching him running ,playing basketball and playing football in the sun.
But now, he's dead.He is dead in my heart.
He flew away . He flew away.
My angle flew to the heaven.
Now,there's a man like him.
But he's an awlful man.
He is really not the style that I love.
I hate him.
I know he is not my angle,although they look the same.
My angle went to the heaven.
Leave me forever.
看看我的修改稿是否更有情谊一些 ？
Love in heaven
I loved a boy who was very pretty.
Every snowy night,I went home along with him.
It's cold outside,but inside my heart i knew there was all warmth.
He was a sunny boy and his smile was so bright.
I liked watching him smiling.
His smile was like the spring.
He was also strong in a healthy way.
I liked watching him running ,playing basketball or football in the sun.
But this boy left — He is dead in my heart.
He flew away ， he flew away — My angle flew to the heaven.
Now,there's another man，maybe with the same look.
But I hate him.
He is really not my style.
I know this : he is not my angle.
My angle has gone to the paradise.
He left me forever.
But now, he's dead.He is dead in my heart.
您确定是用一般现在时？
Leave me forever.
额...Left吧～～～～
差不多看出LZ的意思了，