UC知道请英语老师给批改一篇高一英语作文作文
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2007年山东高考作文 教育部出台了文件宣布招收愿意毕业后回乡执教的免费师范生，你的看法如何？
I agree with the decision made by the Ministry of Education that I don't need to pay for the fee if I am willing to become a teacher in my hometown after graduation from university.
First of all.It is what I want to do after graduation that is to become a teacher because my hometown is not very rich and many students who come from poor villagers can't get very good education,I want to help them to achieve their dreams.
Secondly.My family won't have to afford mu fear and we can save a lot of money.
Finally,education is one of most important things for my motherland to develop fast, I'd like to become one of the people who want to become teachers .
Above all, I can get a lot benefit from it .Not only can my family save a lot of moeny ,but also can it help me to achieve my dream.
S o, I agree with it.
满分30分，我是高一的，请帮忙打分！
I agree with the decision made by the Ministry of Education that I don't need to pay for the fee if I am willing to become a teacher in my hometown after graduation from university.
First of all.It is what I want to do after graduation that is to become a teacher because my hometown is not very rich and many students who come from poor villagers can't get very good education,I want to help them to achieve their dreams.
Secondly.My family won't have to afford mu fear and we can save a lot of money.
Finally,education is one of most important things for my motherland to develop fast, I'd like to become one of the people who want to become teachers .
Above all, I can get a lot benefit from it .Not only can my family save a lot of moeny ,but also can it help me to achieve my dream.
S o, I agree with it.
满分30分，我是高一的，请帮忙打分！
我觉得打24分
总体上看，文章叫你写的是看法，而你却写你自己愿意去当，这应该是站在大众的角度看问题。结构还算完整
语法上看：（1）第一句I agree with the decision made by the Ministry of Education that，that后面的句子应该另外起一句。
（2）It is what I want to do after graduation that is to become a teacher，这句子的that is要去掉，因为it是形式主语，而to后面的才是主语，这里的that is多余。
（3）education is one of most important things ，most前面少了定冠词the。
就这些了，作为高一学生来说很不错了，用了很多的复杂巨型，但是我要说的是，老师们并不会很喜欢复杂句式，所以只要意思清晰，语法正确就能得高分。希望对你有帮助！