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my hobby
I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13. my friend know i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .

the first one i ever got a pair of new shoes .it was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month i bought another shoes

it was good-looking and cool it calls "NO7.T-MAC" now i ever store them in boxes under my bed

my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand to buy for me any more

but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story them!!

I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes(改成I like collecting shoes更好).I have benn(是been) doing(加 this) since I was 13. my friend know(knows) i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .

the first one(改成time) i ever(删去ever) got a pair of new shoes .it(合并成一句,删去.it) was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month (加after)i bought another shoes

it was good-looking(改成nice,good-looking是形容人的) and cool (加,)it calls "NO7.T-MAC" .now i ever(改成have) store(改成stored) them in boxes under my bed

my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand(是want) to buy for me any more

but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story(是store) them!!

my hobby
I want to tell you my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing so since 13. my friend know i like NBA so much that i always run out of my money to bu