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Title: write an essay which examines the way in which the cost of oil is having an effect on economic growth. You should include reference to the impact on three specific businesses.

In the last oil shock, Middle Eastern oil producers angry at the west’s support of Israel, restricted oil supplies. In the three months the oil price rocketed from just over $3 a barrel to nearly $12 which equivalent to just over $81 today. By contrast, nowadays the oil price surged to a new record of $147 a barrel on 11 July 2008, this is mainly because that the increasing tension between the west and Iran which is second largest producer in the oil cartel OPEC. Generally speaking, the oil cartel OPEC means that the Organization of Petroleum Exporting Countries—‘a 13-nation body dominated by Saudi Arabia, Kuwait, and other Middle Eastern countries—was created with the express purpose of influencing prices’. (The soaring price of oil, 2008)

The rising cost of oil is having a major im

producers [were]angry at the
[western ]
[because of the] restricted oil supplies.
[per] barrel to nearly $12 which
[is ] equivalent to just over $81 today.
[was] mainly because that the increasing tension between the west and Iran which [was the] second largest producer in the oil Generally speaking, the oil cartel OPEC means that the Organization of Petroleum Exporting Countries—‘a 13-nation body dominated by Saudi Arabia, Kuwait, and other Middle Eastern countries'—was created with the express purpose of influencing
引号要加对位置,或者不加.这里加了没意思.

world’s [economy],
{ will give pressures onto enterprises and the society to actively explore energy saving techniques and facilities , therefore to push forward the reasonable update of the efficient equipments.}
[eliminate] the impact of soaring oil.

注意词性,语法,和介词.
词用得还行.多看看书报吧,或者范围,看看他们是怎么写的.

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注意基础语法哦..
be angry,which is equivalent ..
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