UC知道帮我的雅思作文【修改下，评下分】
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to what extent do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays, some people hold that university should receive the same number of male students with the female ones. Whether it is right is an interesting topic with discussing.
With the enhanced prominence and stature of females, it is fair to equate females with males. People , who are convinced that more attention should be paid to females, get rid of the conventional thoughts that men should bu more knowledgable and well cultivated than women. Thus, girl students are expected to have the equvalent number with boys in every subject.
However, to some extend, it is hard to perform. It is known to all that there is an unbalanced number between the male freshmen and the female ones every year. It is impossible to classify them into the same numbers in every course. Moreover, boys and girls have different gifts for diverse cou
universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
to what extent do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays, some people hold that university should receive the same number of male students with the female ones. Whether it is right is an interesting topic with discussing（该是to discuss没见过用with的）.
我认为第一段应表明你的观点。你的第一段几乎是重复题目，句型也一般，没太大意义（原谅我说的很不客气）建议重复题目是用比较“高级”的句型，然后表明自己的观点
With the enhanced prominence and stature of females, it is 【fair to equate 】（括号里的两个实义词意思有重复）females with males. People , who are（用have been更好） convinced that more attention should be paid to females, get rid of the conventional thoughts that men should bu more knowledgable and well cultivated than women.（who后的从句和get那个主句表达的内容几乎一样，那还要这个从句干什么，不要为了凑字数或秀语法而写句子） Thus, girl students are expected to have the equvalent number with boys in every subject. （不肯定with这里用的对不对，你好喜欢用with啊）
However, to some extend, it is hard to perform. It