UC知道请高手帮忙修改初中作文if i have a lot of money
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If I have a lot of money, I will do something I love.
When I grow up, I think I will be rich. If I have a lot of money, I will do many things. First I will help old people in the Old People's Homes. I know old people often feel lonely, so if I have a lot of money, I will buy many TVs for them.If I'm free, I will go to the Old People's Homes to talk with them.
If I have a lot of money, I will help poor children as good as possible. I know many children in mountain valleges are too poor to go to school.So if I'm rich, I will give much money and many books to them to open thier eyes.
If I have a lot of money, I will buy a big house for my family. And I will go sightseeing around the world with my parents.
I think the dreams are really beautiful, I believe it will come ture.
When I grow up, I think I will be rich. If I have a lot of money, I will do many things. First I will help old people in the Old People's Homes. I know old people often feel lonely, so if I have a lot of money, I will buy many TVs for them.If I'm free, I will go to the Old People's Homes to talk with them.
If I have a lot of money, I will help poor children as good as possible. I know many children in mountain valleges are too poor to go to school.So if I'm rich, I will give much money and many books to them to open thier eyes.
If I have a lot of money, I will buy a big house for my family. And I will go sightseeing around the world with my parents.
I think the dreams are really beautiful, I believe it will come ture.
我同意楼上的一点就是要在old people,poor children前加定冠词the，至于后面的我有不同的观点，我认为in mountain valleges,open their eyes这些短语是没问题的。
不错哦，加油o(∩_∩)o...
第一段没有什么大问题，不过要在old people 前加上the 表示特指某一类人。
poor children 前也应该加上the。
第二段中的 I know many children in mountain valleges 应该改为，I konw many children in the mountainous area ，还有open their eyes ，你想表达的应该是扩展他们的视野，所以应该用 expand their horizon
基本就这样了。
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