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初一英语
My favourite pet
My favourite pet is a mouse. He is my pet.He is about 1 years old.We called him Dumpling,because he is quite fat.
He has grey-and-black fur.His paws is pink.He has two big black eyes and a shot tail.He huddles like a ball when he sleeps.
He is friendly,but sometimes he is naughty.He ran away for some times.We always find him in the cornerof the room.He is quite quiet.He never makes any noise,even when he is hungry.
He usually eats cereal,sometimes he eats vegetables and fruit.He isn’t any trouble.He lives in a hutch and I put the hutch in a box.He likes to eat apple best.he hates to have a shower.
I feed Dumpling every day and give him clean water.I sometimes paly with him.
Dumpling is really a good friend.He brings me happy and I will look after him until the end.
My favourite pet
My favourite pet is a mouse. He is my pet.He is about 1 years old.We called him Dumpling,because he is quite fat.
He has grey-and-black fur.His paws is pink.He has two big black eyes and a shot tail.He huddles like a ball when he sleeps.
He is friendly,but sometimes he is naughty.He ran away for some times.We always find him in the cornerof the room.He is quite quiet.He never makes any noise,even when he is hungry.
He usually eats cereal,sometimes he eats vegetables and fruit.He isn’t any trouble.He lives in a hutch and I put the hutch in a box.He likes to eat apple best.he hates to have a shower.
I feed Dumpling every day and give him clean water.I sometimes paly with him.
Dumpling is really a good friend.He brings me happy and I will look after him until the end.
...he has two big black eyes and a short(拼错了）tail
....He likes eating (like doing sth) apples/an apple...
动物的话 不应该用He（他） 应用it（它）
我最喜爱的宠物
我最喜爱的宠物是一只老鼠。他是我的宠物，大概一岁了，我们都叫他“胖胖”（或者布丁，或者饺子），因为他实在太胖了。
他有着灰黑相间的皮毛，爪子是粉红色的。他有两只大大的黑眼睛还有一个短短的尾巴。睡觉的时候，他总是挤成一团，就像一只球。
他很友好，但有时候又很顽皮不听话。他有时候会跑走，我们常常会在屋角发现他。他非常的安静，即便是在他生气的时候也从来不制造一点点噪音。
他常常以谷物为食，间或吃一些蔬菜和水果。他从来都是无忧无虑。他住在一个小笼子里，我把这个笼子装在盒子里。他最喜欢吃苹果，但是不喜欢一次性被给予很多。
我每天都给“胖胖”喂食，还有干净的水。有时候我会和他一起玩。
“胖胖”确实是一个很好的朋友，他给我带来了快乐，所以我会一直照顾他直到最后。
很好,不错.
没问题啦!