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题目:Some people believe there is no place for wild animals in 21st century,so to prevent these wild animals form dying out is a waste of resources.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
文章:
NOWADAYS,an increasing number of people begin to focus the problem that we should prevent wild animals from dying out or not.People in different sides have argued that for a long time but the result still has not been found out yet.
Those who disagree to prevent wild animals from dying out believe that people should be considered first than wild animals so it is not need to share resources with wild animals.But they have no idea that animals are the basic of human being.At the same time,varieties of beautful sights in the world also depend on them. Another opinion form the disagreers is that human will never be dead even though all the animals die out.But according to the rule in this nature,we can sure to say that human will must die if all the animals
文章:
NOWADAYS,an increasing number of people begin to focus the problem that we should prevent wild animals from dying out or not.People in different sides have argued that for a long time but the result still has not been found out yet.
Those who disagree to prevent wild animals from dying out believe that people should be considered first than wild animals so it is not need to share resources with wild animals.But they have no idea that animals are the basic of human being.At the same time,varieties of beautful sights in the world also depend on them. Another opinion form the disagreers is that human will never be dead even though all the animals die out.But according to the rule in this nature,we can sure to say that human will must die if all the animals
首先提出一眼就看到的问题：
最后一段开头，So 和 Consequently重复了，要去掉一个， 还有protect them form 应该是from.
还有第三段的shuold -〉should
句式过于单一，用词太简单化。 很多词还拼写错了。 没有详细看，充其量应该是5.5吧。
第一段你的观点是什么？
5或5.5，到不了6。