大家来评评我这篇英语日记!O(∩_∩)O谢谢

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Today I was very interesting.
In morning I ate breakfast.After breakfast.I did my homework.
In afternoon,I played ping-pong with my friends.
Then I went to shopping with my mother and my father.
In evening.I played with my favorite friend.
I think of my day was very interesting,but a little busy.

interest的意思是兴趣,有意思,不能表示高兴,兴奋,快乐。给你改下吧:

What a happy day today.
I ate a delicious breakfast in the morning and finished my homework in the afternoon.
After finishing my homework,I played ping-pong with my friend(和一个人打就用单数).
Then I went to shopping with my mother and father.
In the evening.I played games with my favorite friend.

went shopping就可以不用再加to
而且interesting不可以指人哦。
最后一段确实有些不好。
你可以写成I think today was very interesting but alittle busy。

总体说还可以啦。。
如果能将一些事情再扩大些就会更好!

I am interesting.换成today is an interesting day.比较好。in morning,in afternoon,in evening 换成in the morning,in the afternoon, in the evening比较好

额,
请问你几年级??
我认为不应该用interesting这个词,
感觉像是说"我今天非常有趣",
读上去很奇怪~~
favourite拼错~~
最后一句好像读不通~~
我认为不要用of,
直接"i think my..."
文笔普通,但最后一句我认为不错~~
还有:不需要分这么多段~~
希望你的作文能写得越来越好~~~

句式有点单调,没关系慢慢来。不过有一点,went后面不加to.
因为是过去思考所以用think 的过去式