大家来帮我评评这篇英语日记！O(∩_∩)O谢谢~~~~

额,还是favourite拼错...
我直接帮你改了......
what a happy day today(用it is我认为更好）。
i ate a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched tv in afternoon.(美英一般在and前面不会分段和加标点，54也可以~~）
after watching tv,i did my homework with my favourite friend.
then i played basketball with my friends.
in the evening i take a walk with my father and mother.
i had a happy day!

恩，7年级的文章最好多用点形态，例如：过去将来，过去的过去，过去完成时等等等等~~
还有，不要用这么多段落，
这片比以前的好，
但是最好抓住中心~~

希望对你有用~~

What a happy day （it is)today!
I had a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched TV in the afternoon.
After watching TV,I did my homework with my favorite friend.
Then I played baasketball with my friends.
In the evening I took a walk with my father and my mother.

祝你进步！

今天很快乐。
早晨我吃了一顿很美味的早餐，然后下午看了电视。
看完电视后，我和我最好的朋友一起做作业。
之后我和我的朋友们一起打篮球。
晚上我和爸爸妈妈一起散步。

晕死，我还以为是翻译呢？

说实话有点像流水账，最好再加一些细节，你每一部分都可以再写的详细些啊，