我写的英语作文

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99年全国卷高考作文，大家点评一下，有哪些不足。。30分满分能给打多少分
Dear Mr Smith:
Our school have changed a lot in the past 3 years.3 years ago,our school had only one old teaching building and one playground.Entered our school, he old teaching builing was in front of you and on your right hand was playground.But onw, our school have changed more beautiful.There are 2 new teaching buildings and a library.The library is on the west and playground is out of the school gate beocome more bighger.There are many trees around our school.
Our school is more beautiful than ever,Don't you want to visit us?
Best wishes.
Yours
Li Hua

Can I be honest? there are some grammar mistakes and... it seems like an invitation letter. it should be more formal ,and written in a very polite way, and the format of the letter is wrong. If 30 is the full score.I probably will give you 12.I am sorry. I will not correct it for you. you should do it yourself if you acceot the errors I pointed out, and do it better.Good luck!

Dear Mr Smith:
Our school have changed a lot in the past 3 years.Three years ago,our school had only one old teaching building and one playground. After stepped in our school, the old teaching builing was in front of you. On your right hand was playground.But now, our school have became more beautiful. There are 2 new teaching buildings and a library.The library is on the west and the playground is out of the school gate, it is much bigger now .There are many trees around our school.
Our school is more beautiful than ever,Don't you want to visit us?
Best wishes.