我的英语还不算好,下面的补充说明是我的一篇日记,请大家帮我找找错误,谢谢!!

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/06/15 17:07:43
fall into sad river-break free
These days my heart seems unusual as when I was at chool. I know there are some things which hurt me .
The more I think of these, the more deeply I would fall into sad river.
It’s that I just can't stand or understand my family that what makes me angry is.
I am conscious that I miss some important friends though I can meet them by web, but I want to talk to them face to face to make sure something that I even don't understand. It's just a feeling I can't explain. I just know I miss them.

It's my disappoint that I always think of something that can hardly be born by others or me, so I know I need give away all these heavy burdens which make no difference.
When the sadness become too strong for us to take away our attention, we have to make a decision—waste time on it and twist or accept it correctly and do other meaningful things.
Sad river takes me in an endless black hole. Wake up

1开头第一句建议改为现在时,否则与后面时态不符
2. by web 错。by后面只能加动词 应该为through
3.a feeling为不可数名次,建议改为I just feel that...
4.think o(f) something that can hardly be born by others or me
根据你的语义,我认为改为think about更为合适
5.be born 意为出生,太中式英语拉哥哥!
建议改为 to be made
6.强调句用法正确

顺便说一句,你文笔很棒。要是初中就能写出这种文章就太厉害了。

能力不胜