英语翻译达人帮我看看

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/25 08:25:39
妹妹的学历证书要翻译成英文，但妹妹觉得我找人翻译的不准确，大家帮我看看好吗？
原文:
毕业证书
学生：李阳 性别：女 1985年7月1日生，于2005年9月至2008年7月在本校 旅游英语（航空服务）专业三年制专科学习，修完教学计划规定的全部课程，成绩合格，准予毕业。
校名：北京经贸职业学院

我找人翻译的：
The student Liyang ,Set:female,Was born in july 1 ,1985, has studied in English tourist(air services) Professional of this Institute from September ,2005to July 2008 for 3 years. she completed all the courses in the Teaching profram. The result is qualified ,permits the graduation.
School : Beijing Professional Business Institute

妹妹翻译的：
The student YangLi, female, was borne on 1st July 1985, traveling English (aviation services ) profession, has successfully completed the 3-year studies from September 2005 to July 2008 in this school. She completed all the courses and the result is qualified , she is permitted to graduate.

School: Beijing Professional Institute Aviation College

大家帮我看看哪个准确，如果都有出入可不可以帮我在翻译一下，。谢谢！

毕业证书 - school certificate
学生：student

李阳 性别：女 1985年7月1日生，- Li Yang, female, DOB July 1st, 1985.

于2005年9月至2008年7月在本校 旅游英语（航空服务）专业三年制专科学习，
修完教学计划规定的全部课程，- completed all required modules in Tourism English (aviation services) professional three-year course of this Institute from September ,2005 to July 2008.

成绩合格，准予毕业 - results qualified and graduation granted
校名：北京经贸职业学院 - School name: Beijing Commerce Professional College

Diploma Student: Li Yang Gender: Female July 1, 1985 Health, in September 2005 to July 2008 at the University Tourism English (Air Services) professional three-year vocational learning, complete a full course of prescribed teaching plan, achievements of qualified are allowed to graduate. School Name: Beijing Economic and Trade Vocational College
本人英语过6级

Diploma
Student: Li Yang Gender: Female July 1, 1985 Health, in September 2005 to July 2008 at the University Tourism English (Air Services) pr