UC知道托福独立写作就指教
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自己改了下，没什么感觉，不知道怎么加强（感觉每段不是很丰满的），想上500字。另外估计能拿多少分（满分5分），求高人指教～～拜谢～～
Agree or disagree? It is more important to have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed in work place and school
With the explosive development of the clothing technology, more and more clothes have been designed. When it comes to the revolution of the uniform，is it important to have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed in workplace and school. Admittedly, nowadays it is true that society is calling for personality and fashion, however, in my viewpoint that all the workers and students in the same uniform will be very convenient to manage, and it is ultimately better than people all in different clothes.
At first, all the workers and students in the same clothes will contribute to the efficiency of the management. For instance, in a factory that all workers in the same uniform will lead them work in harmony. What is more, it is also very crucial
Agree or disagree? It is more important to have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed in work place and school
With the explosive development of the clothing technology, more and more clothes have been designed. When it comes to the revolution of the uniform，is it important to have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed in workplace and school. Admittedly, nowadays it is true that society is calling for personality and fashion, however, in my viewpoint that all the workers and students in the same uniform will be very convenient to manage, and it is ultimately better than people all in different clothes.
At first, all the workers and students in the same clothes will contribute to the efficiency of the management. For instance, in a factory that all workers in the same uniform will lead them work in harmony. What is more, it is also very crucial
首先从字数上讲，good是没有问题了。但是想得一个5，恐怕还需要改进。
通过我自己考托福，赛达，以及和美国众哥们的交流我发现，国内的一些写法有些笨拙。我一共考了四次托福，76，91，93，110.四次独立写作均是good,我没背过模板，也没怎么写过文章来背，所以每次考试都是临场写。这样我写的就很随意，不会刻意突出first,second, third而是按照思维顺序写，这样很清晰，同时我喜欢讲时事，personal experience这样相对生动些吧？而且说服力很强，更重要的是写作几乎不需要准备了。当然我也有一些拍砖之语，这些话，来自平时对纽约时报，美国观察者上面的一些文章的抄袭，十分漂亮的评论，深刻且不容质疑，而且由于是十分优美的语言，记起来很容易。
如何改进？加实例！你生活中的例子，专家学者名人的例子，现在纯粹是说理
至于最后总得分，那还要看你听力水平和记忆力
我写到350就是5了，字数其实很关键，先要满足字数，再考虑我说的那些。
都是我自己经验啊，也不一定对的