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The 21st century is the age of information explosion, to the entire world, and nearly every one is more and more conditioned to get and use all kinds of information. Meanwhile, news media plays a highly influential role in our life. Because of this, some people think that it is a negative development. Personally, I think this view overlooks important factors of this issue.
There is no doubt that news media enriched our life and advanced personal quality to adapt to the high-speed development of world. To start with, news media saves us a great deal of time with less and actions to achieve our intention. For instance, in 1980, reading newspapers was the best way for people to get the news, but it coasted money and time. By contrast, people would receive all kinds of news by pressing some buttons, because of vast of news Medias ’putting in use. It makes it easy to enrich people’s life quality with less cost. In the second place, through the closer contraction b