初一的作文，介绍自己 帮忙挑错 速度

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My self
I am a girl! My name is xxx.I'm13 years old.
I like piay computer games and watch TV .But I like play with my friends,too.
My favourite color is white .I think it's so beautful. I don't like green.But my best friend Jeff does.
Sometimes,I play sports onweekends.I like play badminton.
I have a good team! It's group six.Ilove every members in my team.
I have many friends. Watermelon,Jeff,Snoopy,and more.
My favourite fruit is melons. But watermelon likes pineapples.
This is me.A lovely girl! Do you like me ?
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帮我挑挑错误。。我自己写的。高分哦。。！！！
告诉我错哪了。并告诉我怎么改正！！谢谢~

Myself

I am a girl! My name is xxx. I'm13 years old.
I like (playing) computer games and (watching) TV. But I like (playing) with my friends too. My favourite color is white. I think it's so (beautiful). I don't like green.But my best friend Jeff does. Sometimes, I play sports on weekends. I like (playing) badminton. I (am in) a good team! It's group six. I love every (member) in my team. I have many friends, (such as) Watermelon, Jeff, Snoopy and (many) more. My favourite fruit is (melon). (I prefer) watermelon (to) pineapples. This is me, a lovely girl! Do you like me ?

还行吧，最主要的错误就是： like doing sth. 不是 like do sth. 改的地方都用了括号。

第二段的But应改为And

@标题myself不用空格的
@I like piay computer games ---piay 是play
@But I like play with my friends,too.---But 应该是and
@ beautful---beautiful
@I think it's so beautiful可换成Because it's so beautiful
@But my best friend Jeff does.---does换成like it（个人意见）
@I like pla