谁能帮我选出这个文章里面的语法错误和用词错误

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Hi everyone, This is my frist article,I want you help me mark my article,tell me which sentence have mistake ,which word have mistake
so ,start now

yoyo,i name is XXX,i am a student from high school,i was 14 years old ,now ,i am at new zealand, i want to learn english better,so,
i want to by a article help me learn it ,i have 8 years plan ,after 2 years ,i age to be 16,i think when i am 16 my english more better,
i have to go to work ,sure ,i job is not a full time job ,only part time job ,i can work and learn english together,i wii be keep working
part time to my 22 years old,if i have enough credit to university, i wii wait for my university finish ,and ,when i university
graduation, i wii go back to china ,mates, wait for me ,haha ,this article dont have whole steps, i skip too many steps, but ,i hope i can do these thing,thank you for you mark

Yoyo,my name is XXX,i am a student from xxx high school,i was 14 years old .Now ,i am in new zealand, i want to learn more english ,so,
i want to write a article to help me to learn it ,i have a 8 years plan ,after 2 years ,my age will be 16,i think when i am 16 my english had to be more better,
i have to go to work ,for sure ,my job is not a full time job ,it's only a part time job ,i can work and learn english together,i will keep on working
part time to my 22 years old,if i have enough credit to university, i will wait till university finish ,and ,when i'm in university
graduation, i will go back to china .Mates, wait for me ,haha ,this article don't have whole steps, i skip too many steps, but ,i hope i can do these things,thank you for you mark